This is my latest attempt at following the guide and creating a quality paragraph that will summarize my entire story. I keep doing research into the things I want to include, and changing my outline to accommodate. Here goes:
9:40 pm 11/16/11
When the sun fails to rise, the slaves in The Mining City panic and turn violent, and The Prince is forced to flee to the rafts in the harbor. With a small number of rafts, The Prince leads his people northward to The Great Fortress, believng that his father, The Emperor will have fared better through the Evernight, only to discover that The Great Fortress is destroyed, and his father is dead. The Prince is crowned The People's King, and with no reason to stay at the ruin, they gather up more survivors, and head northward into the lands of the Ape Men, where they fight for food and supplies, and lose many friends. Once they are past the worst of the lands of the Ape Men, they come across a simple fishing folk who claim that more Men live in the northern lands, but a rival to The King leads some of The People west instead of continuing north. When The King reaches the other land of Men, he finds a group of survivors living in squallor, their culture also destroyed by the Evernight, and being unable to persuade their leaders to join him, The King sends the last of his force out to either secure the land, or die trying.
10:07pm
9:40 pm 11/16/11
When the sun fails to rise, the slaves in The Mining City panic and turn violent, and The Prince is forced to flee to the rafts in the harbor. With a small number of rafts, The Prince leads his people northward to The Great Fortress, believng that his father, The Emperor will have fared better through the Evernight, only to discover that The Great Fortress is destroyed, and his father is dead. The Prince is crowned The People's King, and with no reason to stay at the ruin, they gather up more survivors, and head northward into the lands of the Ape Men, where they fight for food and supplies, and lose many friends. Once they are past the worst of the lands of the Ape Men, they come across a simple fishing folk who claim that more Men live in the northern lands, but a rival to The King leads some of The People west instead of continuing north. When The King reaches the other land of Men, he finds a group of survivors living in squallor, their culture also destroyed by the Evernight, and being unable to persuade their leaders to join him, The King sends the last of his force out to either secure the land, or die trying.
10:07pm
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